A poem for Kids 2
For the Kids who missed the first poem:
A Poem for Kids 1
Freaky freaks are on the peak.
Lunacy is what you seek.
Just punch your eyes
And let them leak.
Flicks and tricks,
Sticks and bricks,
Shots and stabs
Are just for kicks.
Cut the crap,
Just take a nap.
I'll leave you alone,
Can't you see the trap?
A growing bud,
Drops of blood,
Stains on sleeves,
All buried in mud.
Late at night
Stars are bright.
I'm next to a corpse
Paralyzed with fright.
Tears and sighs
Sometimes are lies.
But deep inside
You'll hear the cries.
Through your mind
You'll dig to find
Truth and deceit
And fear that's blind.
Reread the lines,
They're not just rhymes.
You're hypnotized
By shining signs!
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posted by hurricane_x @ 5:24 PM
24 Comments:
hehehe
i dont know why bas it reminded me of Jumanji!!!!!
I like that.. the whole idea of kids' poem :D
Reread the lines,
They're not just rhymes.
You're hypnotized
By shining signs!
greaaat work!!
I think the 1st one was stronger though! both are still freaky :)
I like the whole rythm of the poem, using monosyllabic words, give it this sense of being hyptonised
the long e sound : peak,. leak
crap, trap
then BANG sound as signs to wake up
short trick, kicks
blood, mud
and all are unfolded and reiterated in the final lines!
I raise a hat! indeed
w kol sana wenta tayb :D
shoot me !
creepy!!! love ittho:))
أسأل الله لكم فى شهر رمضان حسنات تتكاثر وذنوب تتناثر وهموم تتطاير وأن يجعل بسمتكم سعادة وصمتكم عبادة وخاتمتكم شهادة ورزقكم فى زيادة...
أدعو الله أن يتقبل منا و منكم الصيام و القيام وصالح الأعمال
Late at night
Stars are bright.
I'm next to a corpse
Paralyzed with fright.
loooool for kids yup like us y3ni
rhyme is amazing and I agree with Maat about Jumanji thing
nice work and happy ramdan :))
Wow, I loved it! :)
Reminiscent of ring around the rosy. A children’s rhyme that was originally penned to make kids aware of the plague.
Ring around the Rosy:
One of the first visible signs of infection were red rings surrounding a rosy bump.
Pocket full of Posy:
Keep the air surrounding you sanitary.
Ashes, Ashes, We all Fall Down:
no need to elaborate.
I guess the vague relevance lies in the poetic darkness of both pieces.
maat..
yeah, I guess it somehow relates to the atmosphere of the movie!!
And it suits the freaky KG kids :)
epitaph..
thx..
wenty tayebah:)
batabeet..
BANG!
...BANG!!
insomniac..
glad u liked it:)
sorsara..
GOD bless u..
Amen.
ma-3lina..
thx,..
yep, for kids like u :)
deemco..
cool, and thanks for the visit!
zerocool..
mmm..
"the vague relevance lies in the poetic darkness of both pieces"
yeah, but "Black Death" is much more darker,..
or at least I hope so!!
For some reason...
It just didnt sink in.
mmm...
Maybe because it's for kids!
speechless and terified, thanks :(
hafsa..
u r welcome :)
lol at its for kids, that just makes it so my cup of tea!
I enjoyed it, and are you a happytreefriends fan?
sure, they r marvelous :)
looool
Cut the crap,
Just take a nap.
I'll leave you alone,
Can't you see the trap?
ya satr..agheb kl da we arg3 ala2ek kda brdo...lool
nice one..im back 3la fkra
hey,...welcome back!!
Long time no see :)
some words I don't understand
It seems that I'm really strong in language :(
I thik that i need to have a dictionary
Anyway, You made a work which I should give you regards on .. cause you take care of kids .. the symbol of pureness
So Go Ahead Agaaaaaaaaaaaaaain
God bless you
Happy feast
Happy Feast :))
eman eltaher...
I'm just poisoning their thoughts!
Happy feast :)
ma-3lina..
Happy feast :)
Are you paying for the kid's therapy?
Cause they gonna need it..
maxxed' out...
No, I'm the therapist!
is that a poem for kids or a poem for freaks ?Ure going too far young man....:):):)
yeah,..too far to come back :)
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